Tuesday 12 May 2015

Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.
Man in space.jpg
A space alien  bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. As the space alien comes out of the  ship he feels so happy to finally get to  see the milkyway.When he already sore it he want back the his alien ship so he went  to earth.

When he got to earth he saw lots of srage people and srage pets. like dog’s, cat’s, rabbit’s and lots more pets. The people he saw looked srage as well he saw boys with big hair and girls with long hair and the space alien had no hair it all.

When he knoted he was mud and want back to his planet called mares and told all his friends and family and said there lots of sarge people at a planet called earth.

He said to them all and the planet is so big and they had long loges that has same leaves that looked like little steak but they are green and dark green as well.

We will say here and never go back to that planet aigen so we can be safe and kids are more safe then us because they are importer to us all.Then after they told all the a there alien they never want back to earth for a long time.So the people at earth is safe as well same as the alien's at there know planet are safe as well.

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